by Dewoueld May 17, 2017
category :
Fun, humor /
other
Find myself wondering how they got all to Twisted Rooster in the winter States Supply black and gold just get it right simple easy back your tracks right golden acres for sale. And people see these things come to pass and everybody will know the truth despite the confusion that seeks to come all the way and I do okay pondering such things as I wander away sometimes it just takes a little bit longer the fire still burns the emperor's Pride |
by ether
Not bad content, but the grammar needs working on. Maybe have a look at some other poems on the site or read up on some other poetry to see the benefits of using line breaks and/or punctuation. Your message is very quirky and I have no problems with that, but the grammar really lets this piece down. For me, it helps to read the piece out loud after I've penned it... just to check if it flows properly and makes sense. |