Comments : The straight and narrow

  • 7 years ago

    by Wayne Gates

    Great poem.
    I felt a little sad at the beginning and then had a chuckle in the end.

    • 7 years ago

      by mossgirl19

      My feelings, exactly! I love the positive ending, Michael though the rest of the poem was really sad. Always do decline! :-)

    • 7 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Wayne :)
      Always good to write, when there is a possible positive ending

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    I know exactly what you mean..

  • 7 years ago

    by Michael

    Thank you Miss M :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Sadness and quirky humour combined. A lovely piece Michael x

    • 7 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Milly; )

  • 7 years ago

    by Ren

    Excellent write, Michael!!

    • 7 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Ren :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Britt

    Judging comments: Ha! This poem had a sweet and sassy twist at the end, and that alone is getting my vote. I appreciate the lightheartenedness, especially after the beginning felt so heavy. I was so intrigued and it took me another way. Definitely fun. We often find ourselves seemingly alone but there is always someone out there willing to give us company - and when it's unhealthy, we run! I love this poem. Awesome job!

  • 7 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Judges comments

    "The Stragight And Narrow" By Michael 4 points

    On reading this I had visions of a man walking down a forest path with only his thoughts for company, the wind rustling the leaves of trees creating eerie whispers.

    With regards the last stanza, it is true sometimes we can be alone and yet we will not be lonely,

    A very well worked and captivating piece (4)