Powerful stuff, dark and very well written and rhymed.
Just one edit: 'revealing in my pain' - should this be 'revelling'?
Great write and all the best,
Ben

Stuck for words but nominated

Craig

It's a powerful write. I felt your pain and defeat in each word. So well done-

Extremely powerful write

Wow- totally blown away by everyone's comments, I feel very honoured <3
Ben- thanks for noticing the typo- edited lol!

JUDGES COMMENT: This is one of those writes that resonates with many of us where someone we love watches us drowning (I feel in misery) and either adds to the misery or just doesn't care if that makes sense. It's just so very powerful.