Battlefield of Fear (Sonnet)

by Kasie   Aug 19, 2017


The bell, it tolls a deathly ringing chime,
It echoes though the jagged hills I tread.
My life is just a bomb of ticking time,
And death is just a step away I dread.

Encased behind a wall of constant fear,
Of hope that's lost within a battlefield.
Emotions cause a war of falling tears,
And beats upon the fragile shield I wield.

I stand upon this field of fallen dreams,
And weep into the sands of faltered time.
My life is just a bag of tricks it seems,
But here I stand upon this rock of mine.

A life that's filled with fear is hard to beat,
So stand upon a rock and don't retreat.

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  • 6 years ago

    by DarkLight

    Nicely written piece,

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Kasie, it's good to see you back writing I must say I've missed your words because they resonate so much with me which sometimes is unfortunate as they are usually so full of emotion and rawness yet so beautifully done. This piece is definitely no exception.

    1/ This is an extremely sad opening it's like the clock chimes have hypnotised you with its 'deathly ringing' and it's constantly ringing reminding you that death closes in on us every second of every day and sometimes that's all we can think about because it's a terrible thing.

    2/ very powerful, we're always wrapped up in the bad times and seem to forget the good times which makes the bad times seem neverending causing us to feel like we're on the battlefield against ourselves and our emotions and usually they win, right? Heads up: typo on wield.

    3/ The imagery here is astounding and so sad but it could be me standing there in that field fighting emotions and holding on to a thread of hope and drowning in dreams that we've failed to reach but we can only ever do our best even if that seems far our of reach and not good enough. "Life is just a bag of tricks" < love this line so true.

    couplet/ What an amazing end. One of inspirational words because I felt you say times may be tough but we should never give up on our dreams.

    Love this
    Em x

    • 7 years ago

      by Kasie

      Em, I've always enjoyed your comments. They are an art of their own. Your interpretation is pretty much on point.

      The two parts about 'standing in a rock', the rock is meant to stand for a friend or a loved one you lean on. My husband is my rock who helps me through and fights with me.

      Also thank you for pointing out the typo; I didn't even notice.

  • 7 years ago

    by Michael

    Kasie

    I love writing sonnets and enjoy reading them too. And yours is a beauty :))

    Well done

    Michael :)x

    • 7 years ago

      by Kasie

      Thank you, I'm still learning. Mr Darcy and Ben helped me learn the form a few months ago.

    • 7 years ago

      by Kasie

      Thank you, I'm still learning. Mr Darcy and Ben helped me learn the form a few months ago.

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Kasie, this is beautiful. Wow.

    • 7 years ago

      by Kasie

      Thank you.

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Kasie,
    I always knew you had a real flair for sonnets and your return to the form proves me conclusively right. This is genuinely excellent, from the meter, to the content and final couplet.

    All the best as always,
    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Kasie

      Thank you. This is the one I told you I was working on, but I got stuck writing it. I had to scrap the original and rewrite it.

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