by Kryptonite Dreamer Aug 24, 2017
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
Sitting alone, |
I really feel for the narrator in this poem, because the saddest people always smile on the outside, but they are caged with sadness and anguish on the inside. The dark reality you take the reader on is simply well done. I feel the voice you have in this piece could make for a short story, to get more of your message out! |
by Lucifer
Were you really serious while writing it or it's just a fiction? |
by Mark
This is a very serious journey you take the reader on. From the excellent way you described the blade as pleading for your wrist. To the composition of the letter, the contents within the letter are very direct. Overall has a good flow. I found the reference to the family photo very moving. |