Wow ... this is great!
"Folded arms and shore gazing" ... we all know this stance so well. But the whole thing is beautifully written ... that awful feeling when you know you've lost the other person.
Very moving.
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Wow...actually so engrossed in it from the first word. Splendid work, Mark! Much depth and beautiful tone.You took me to a journey... a sad one. Loved it.

Amazing Mark, by far the best work of your.
It's like you have written my feelings in the last stanza.

Loved it, bro!

Please someone nominate this..

Mark, I just loved this. I think all of us have been in this situation. One has checked out and the other silently pleading for one more chance. Beautifully done -

Glad to see this one nominated. Excellent work indeed.

All the very best,

Ben

Wow! Amazing write. Well done!

I have no words!!

"What answers can be found in nature when all is hollow inside." - Yikes, what a perfect line... this really blew me away.

Your word use in this piece is on point, getting your point across while also painting a beautifully tragic picture of a once impassioned romance weakened over time into one-sided love. The first verse really had me envisioning a sort of dark, gothic scene -- it really was a sort lucid imagery as I'd get from a book.

I enjoyed this piece, great work.
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