Nice work, telling the story from the view of a jumper. 9/11 is a truly sad event. It will be remembered forever.

Sad indeed but creative and intense writing! This day is definitely a deep scar on the heart of America I always appreciate a good patriotic piece! Well done.

Harsh memories of a time so filled with pain and confusion.
Very well constructed which flows well.

*3rd line second stanza is 'hurdle' meant to read huddle?

Anyway well done
Michael :)

Deep painful write that gave me goosebumps. It was a terrible time I still remember the shock of seeing it on CN news on our laptops at work. It shook the World and still continues as a sorrowful eminder of the horrors of the terrible things a minority of humans others. Milly x

It's a very hard thing to try to imagine what must have gone through the minds of those people on that day and the terrible choice they were forced to make. I think you've done justice to how we might imagine that to be if we were prepared to go to that dark place in our minds.
Thank you for this sad but timely reminder. Achingly sad but beautifully written.
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I think everyone remembers where they were that day.

I was working and was completely oblivious until late afternoon. I took a break and turned the radio on. The show I would listen to back then was a total laugh.

The first words I heard were from DJ Mark Radcliffe. "Everything we do today fades to insignificance"

I was like what the hell is going on.

Then after a few phone calls the true horror of it became apparent. Later when home and seeing the footage on TV I just sat there completely mute.

It's a day no one will every forget.

What you have captured in your writing is amazing but I'm glad I wasn't in your head when you did so.

Fantastic work and a fitting tribute to all those poor souls

Craig

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A Jump To The Other Side by marvellous efe points 4
This piece was a real eye opener, I say this because I remember (like many others) watching the scenes of 9/11 unfold on TV and it felt like something from a film not real life and to put yourself in those people's shows that died because they tried jumping to safety probably knowing they'd die anyway is something of a wonderful sad tribute to all those lifes that have been lost not just America but all over the world because of terrorism. We stand together against terror.

I did like it , a lot...
It is an accorate hym to the sentiment of loss and despair that gripped america That Fatidic day
I would post this poem : read by a somber strong voice ...
I would make a video of Arlington cemetery and a soft patriotic music as background
I would title it
No one will ever forget
Bravo Marv