Raw and bloody you can feel the anger

The second verse had so much emotion within itself.. Very relatable. I enjoyed reading this due to the rhythmatic flow. Great write indeed.

Holy moly this hits something deep and raw inside of me that screams "let me out" those last two lines though are the making of this piece don't let anybody grind you down

Ooh OUCH! This is dark but brilliant. You've depicted the raw pain perfectly! :-)
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Ha! That's the way you go...hehe. I love this. I felt the pain with your great imagery and the ending hits hard.