Comments : Stop the Hate

  • 7 years ago

    by Mark

    I'm with you Nam's - requesting help is not a weakness! Great message behind this! The result of hate is the acrostic message
    Hugs

  • 7 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    The first two lines I feel would make more sense if they were:
    "Deadly words from poisonous tongues eat at even the purest of souls." With "eating", it would sound better with an "Are", which would be uncomfortable where it is and ruin the acrostic.

    After hatred, I'd put a comma.

    Overall, it's a great message, a true message, and the more we all spread the message the more it will be heard. Unfortunately, as much as we try to make the world better, humans are animals in their nature and will act as such... selfishly guarding what's theirs, content in their contentedness no matter how discontent others are. A little empathy goes a long way, though.

    I love the flexibility the first two lines. I honestly could even go as far as to say that, even though you're referring to hatred, the poem overall is regarding death; the "deadly words" could be something along the lines of our president saying, "Carry out the attack"... and a nuclear weapon is no small, trivial affair. It would result in a lot of death.

    Overall, this poem reminds me of a summation of the exchange that's been going on between North Korea and the USA. With Jimmy Carter swooping in to try to save the day because our President would never admit to a weakness, and for sure one of those weaknesses is diplomacy.

    Overall, a great message, love it; it made me think, and it's quite layered.

    Nominated, though I still recommend changing "eating".

    Much love,
    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Edited. Thank you S for the detailed comment.. :)
      i was more trying to tie in the way hate leads to death.. in any sort of situation.. such as the USA vs Nth K.. or school yard bullying or even just general hateful word spat out of peoples mouths..

      I have said such things without realising and it is the humanity in me.. however i always appologise and try to rectify it.

      thank you also for the nomination.

  • 7 years ago

    by MoonMaiden

    Man.. This is deep. Alot of people are scared to reach out..this is a great way to express it's okay. Going in my favs!

  • 7 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Asking or requesting help is a sign of great strength. Thank you for sharing. All the best.

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Beautiful message Nams. Thank you for posting this. :-)

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Very well said and so glad it's nominated

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Amen Nams, it's hard hitting truth that we all need to heed. Well done-

  • 7 years ago

    by Michael

    Miss nams

    Wow! a really clever piece and the layout is just brilliant. Well worthy of a front page splash
    Much love
    Michael x :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    JUDGING COMMENT:
    Stop the hate by deeplydesturbed points 4
    This piece was very honest, emotional and I'm guessing touched many of us here as much as it touched me. Though a short piece it speaks volumes. The words just flow off the tongue and onto paper and makes the piece a powerful one with punchy lines