This would make a great song..if it isn't already. I like the repetition gives it character. Can sense the sadness & lost feeling you portrayed well. The rhyming patters made it fun to read. Great job!

Some Random Human, this is some heartbreaking write. The repetition here worked well...I liked the intensity being built up with the use of it. The flow also is good, with beautiful subtle rhyming.

Being a fan of repetition too, I felt the ending was a little weak. I wish the last two lines were:

'it's like the winter, it knows my name
what's the point...in it anyway'

I just felt it would end up with more hopelessness with that. :-)