by Diablosangel87 Nov 3, 2017
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Nobody can replace your warmth, and sweet embrace. When I'm a sleep I dream about you, and think about you. I wish I could go back to the times spent with you, and beg for a nother chance to love you as you deserve to be. I think of the promises we made each other you promised me heaven on earth, you took me to the most beautiful place but I can't exist there with out you. You introduced the beat to me, you showed me how to be in sync with the rhythm and suddenly you take the music away, you made me believe the beat would last forever. I never thought that anyone, or anything could ever come between us just as much as a bullet cannot penetrate through bullet proof. When I saw you I knew it was true I would fall in love with you, now I can't get over you my heart feels torn, and ripped apart because I'm right back at the start. I set here crying,needing,wishing you were here with me what happen to our love? it used to be so bright,loving,laughing and caring. Then soon caught the night you were my one and only love i cared for you to much I just love you so much I'm just scared to lose you. Your eyes shine like crystals under the sea, you make me as happy as can be oh how I wish things were as they used to be... |
by mossgirl19
Being lumped in a single paragraph the read must flow naturally to hold the reader's attention until the end. The sentiments in this one are effectively expressed, and the one stanza structure for me just fitted very well. A heart breaking write. |