I love the ending to this, it flows nicely.

I love this. Painfully pleasant... As sad as the situation is, this is wonderful work.

Forbidden fruits - can end up tasting bitter.

A good account of a situation, put together well

Michael :)

I've kinda been out of the game for a wee while so forgive me if I get things a little wrong in anything I say.

Firstly you rhyme a little like I me (yay I'm not alone) "smiles"

Totally loved the flow of the poem and the content. For this reason I am nominating it.

If I had one criticism it would only be that the last line of the second verse (stanza) could really have benefited from the addition of one word to aid it's flow.

I don't measure and calculate, I do not word count. Sometimes you just feel and think.

All in all

Pretty fantastic

Craig

Hi guys,

Thank you for the comments, I appreciate it.

This is excellent! The flow, content and rhyme are spot on and the subject very relatable :-)
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Wow! I love this ! It is beautifully written !