this will be a reoccurring narrative so everyone knows...i will keep submitting the next part when they're made in case somebody wants to follow them

Excellent, Robert. the trick with narrative poetry is to make sure the distinction remains between prose and verse. With your smooth rhyming and excellent visuals, you do this really well and manage to keep the reader enthralled as well. I will get to the next part later.

All the best,

Ben

As Ben already mentioned. Ensuring narrative poetry is distinctive and not taken as prose can be difficult but your inclusion of rhyme and the detail creating great visuals really works. Look forward to reading the next instalment. Best wishes Milly x