by Walter Dec 28, 2017
category :
Love, romance /
new love
Sometimes I feel like saying |
by Em (marmite)
The rhyming in this is perfectly done and the whole thing was just beautifully sad |
by Lost One
I enjoyed reading this. If I could offer some advice it would be to watch the syllable count. You have such an ear for rhyme, but the closer the number of syllables in each line the less stress it will put on the rhymes. The first stanza is spot on, but as you go on the lines get a tad wordy. |
by Walter
Thanks for your comments Tony and I appreciate you pointing that out. I must admit I wrote this as quickly as I thought about it and it might need more refining. |
by Em
This is fantastic |
by Walter
You're too kind...Thanks Em |
A lovely tale of love and belief in the possibilities and magic of life. Inspirational and captivating. Milly x |
by Walter
Thanks kindly for you comments Milly :)x |
by mossgirl19
Ahh, Walter this is an inspiring story! I am touched by it. Good flow, I love it. |
by Walter
Thank you Mel! I'm glad you found it inspiring and I love hearing when things like this story still happen. |