Seeking Peace
by Kitty Cat Lady Jan 7, 2018
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There's nothing my mind will forgive |
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6 years ago
by naaz
To be honest, I wanted to nominate this poem for this week but didn't get the pleasure of doing it. It's good to see it has been nominated.
We see other people around us with glee on their faces, and we assume our life would be like them. I always think, are they really happy?
Except the politicians, almost everyone in this world is looking for peace. Some want peace with their friends, some with their relatives, their sons and daughters, but most of them want peace with their daily life.
Each day is a new challenge, full of puzzled and every day we have to look for the solutions to solve those puzzles so that we could survive.
While finding solutions, we get so involved that even during the sleep these daily chores run through our mind instead of dreams (a place full of wonders) and turn it into a nightmare.
We constantly feel worry about what has happened today and what is going to happen tomorrow and our life becomes a fight of our own past and future.
To seek peace meditation is more important than medication as it brings positive energy and thank God you didn't fall into that trap by far.
Kitty, the best thing about your writing style is that you keep on experimenting instead of the results. You always find new ways to make new admirers of your poems. Honestly, I always read your poems and like them too, but as I once said to you, "comment less, but proper."
This poem is unique in its own way. It shows the struggle of a person who wants to fall into sleep, so she could finally find some peace, but not getting it because of the constant thinking going on her mind about the affairs of the past and the future.
In this constant fight between the past and future which is going on inside her mind, her present is getting affected keeping her away from peace.
Along with the rhyming you take good care of your timing too. Like, which word to put where or which stanza should come first.
Just keep on evolving, keep on exploring, keep on experimenting and keep on surprising us like this forever.
All the best!-
6 years ago
Wow Naaz! Thanks so much for taking the time for such a thorough and flattering comment, I really do appreciate it so much.
I love poetry, in that inspiration never runs out! If real life stuff isn't inspiring, then the imagination kicks in. Unfortunately this one is real life but it's only this bad occasionally now, rather than being the norm, for which I'm very grateful! :-) x
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6 years ago
by naaz
Dear, if I had to flatter you I could have commented on every single poem of yours.
Yes there are two places in the poem where the rhyme scheme is not exact, but anyone would ignore it in comparison to the content of the poem.
So, I was honest about the last section of the comment.
Kitty, not many people (like me) go beyond the limits and those who go find a whole new world of possibilities.
My best wishes to you on that new world of poetry!
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6 years agoby Stephanie
Very strong piece
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6 years ago
Thanks Stephanie :-) x
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6 years ago
by Ben Pickard
The mind can be a terribly taxing thing with all those wretched thoughts it brings to the party...especially in the wee hours.
Take care, Kitty.-
6 years ago
Indeed it can! Thanks so much for your comments Ben :-) x
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6 years ago
by Em
I'm sure the word you're looking for is insomniac lol hmm why do I relate to this?
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6 years ago
Lol, I managed to write the whole thing without using that word Em, haha
Thanks :-) x
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6 years ago
by Lost One
If I fall asleep now I'll get 5 hours of sleep... if I fall asleep now I'll get 4 hours of sleep...
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6 years ago
by Em
Why does this remind me of someone *eyes rolling* lol
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6 years ago
Yeah! Then you get to the point where you'd be grateful for even an hour! Thanks Tony :-) x
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