Comments : RISE, FALL & RISE AGAIN

  • 6 years ago

    by Robert Long

    this is only to me but it seems lines 7 & 14 are a bit long to keep a rhythm however the words of the poem make up for that. The way you put this is beautiful and well written. Good job.

    -Robert

    • 6 years ago

      by Khadz

      Appreciate your time and your comment on my work :) Thank you so much.

  • 6 years ago

    by Pratap Rudra

    Liked the phraseology and the message too...

    • 6 years ago

      by Khadz

      Thank you dear Pratap

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben

    this is the first i've read from you, i have to say you write beautifully, great word choices and structure....

    "Rise,Fall and Rise again,
    Love your deeds as you love yourself,
    And always remember,positive thoughts help you create yourself."

    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    this in particular was very thought provoking and frankly amazing!

    Great writing, i look forward to reading more from you.

    Ben

    • 6 years ago

      by Khadz

      Awww thank you so much Ben much much appreciated dear :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben

    Apologies double post!

    must've got excited lol ><

    • 6 years ago

      by Khadz

      Yea I got super duper excited :)