Wonderfully written, I really like this.....

I like the way you have presented this - it is a form I have used and enjoyed. It allows for the pace to be dictated. It is easy to restrict the readers flow with a line break or just a single word. I also like the refrain, this for me helped link the elongated stanzas and hit home a message: We are in control of our destiny, if we slow down, take stock, we can make changes - we are in control.