Comments : Valentine's day

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    A beauty my friend

    Michael :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Hellon

    Another beautiful write from you...I love the tone of your first sentence, just so melancholy.

    I have a couple of suggestions for you to look at...

    Emotions carved into the words or a
    Nest wove with the silk of your dreams *woven*

    I'm not sure if you mean this to be a question or if I'm just reading it like it is but..if it's a question I suggest tacking a little ? at the end.

    It's shorter than some of your other poems, I understand this is because it's an acrostic, but...still packed with emotion... I loved it :)

    EDIT

    Once again I've been beaten to the nomination board but...it doesn't matter who nominated it as long as it's there.

  • 6 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    One of the prettiest acrostics I have read in a long time....

    Truly a pleasure to read!!

  • 6 years ago

    by naaz

    SG, I requested you to work on the structure and you changed the format. An acrostic on Valentine's day.

    I am glad that this week I got this honor to nominate three poems but different in their own way.
    Your poem is about asking and expecting the same from our lover. KCL, poem says one should move on and don't wait too long and then sir Michael's poem defines the true meaning of valentine.

    You changed the format but theme is once again the same, expectation. To be honest, dear friend, it's the most dangerous side effect of love. It neither let us live, nor let us die.

    The content of the poem is very strong and as Andrea said,"one of the prettiest acrostic" I second on that. I had already nominated an acrostic poem on the valentine but the moment I read it I just fell in love with the beauty of this poem. For a moment I felt you had put your heart on the table for your lover.
    The language of the poem can be defined by many terms but I just want to use word honest for this poem. I felt honesty in your words. I couldn't choose any favorite line because I loved the whole poem.

    I loved what you did with the blank space between Valentines and day. To me, those four dots looks like stars. Four dots.... representing four letters

    L
    O
    V
    E

    a constellation of stars, love constellation.

    Brother, I just hope the one for whom you write all these beautiful poems sees someday this constellation of love you have created in your heart for her.

    All the best!

    • 6 years ago

      by Ya----Na

      I thought I should create a little constellation of love fr my universe on dis valentine. Maybe she sees it some day.
      Tnx bro for all ur love & support.

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Well done my friend, and well deserved front page splash

    Michael :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Scott Cole

    Congratulations on ur win!!!!!

  • 6 years ago

    by naaz

    Congratulations SG

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Congratulations on your front page win! A lovely acrostic indeed.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ren

    Beautiful write! Congrats on the win :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    As I read it I saw a letter/card decorated for Valentine's
    Day but it holds the colors of feelings as decoration and heartfelt
    words...nice. Congrats on the Win!

    Thank you for the comment on my write...appreciate it.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Thank you so much Ms Meena, Ren, Brenda, Scott, micheal and naaz once again for nominating it.

  • 6 years ago

    by Hope

    Great poem

  • 6 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Judging comment:

    A phenomenally done acrostic poem.
    The passion of love and poetry is very much alive within the lines of your poem even if the relationship portrayed here might have seen some dying embers to a previously lit flame, and it grabs me as a reader because of its slow and romantically hopeful pace. I, especially, love the way the poem has been concluded: with a question of hope.