by Mr. Darcy Apr 10, 2018
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
within the rain, I heard your name |
Judging comment: |
by Mark
Great win! |
by Ya----Na
Congrats! |
by Ben Pickard
Fully deserved, good fellow - well done. |
by Ben Pickard
Love this, Michael. All I would say is that in line 8 you seem to lose a syllable. However, the ellipsis makes up for it with pause, to a certain extent. |
by Mr. Darcy
thanks, Ben. I did think of placing an 'oh, where are you...' but I rather like the idea of being lost for words. |