Taking Stock (Etheree)
by Kitty Cat Lady Apr 16, 2018
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Love |
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6 years ago
by Mr. Darcy
I've always found shaped poetry fascinating. Shapes to play with. Words to shape and mold into mind images and visual art.
Your poem starts off with the word; Love. This sitting up the top of your word pyramid is symbolic to its importance, right? Like a previous comment, I like the currency metaphor. People say, "the best things in life are free", but that's not true, is it...
Lovely Etheree, Kitty. X-
6 years ago
Exactly. Love isn't free and the cost is to give back. It's the only way it works.
I keep meaning to explore shaped poetry some more, it does look pretty!
Thanks for your comments Mr D :-) x
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6 years ago
by Hellon
Kitty..at the moment (for me anyway) it just sounds very stilted..like a whole bunch of sentences
Love
is not
ever free,
it has a price.
To get you must give
when only one invests
and the other only spends
then you'll always be in the red
paying with credit and overdrawn
love is the currency, tears are the debt.
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6 years ago
Thanks Hellon, that totally makes sense with the capital letters. I'll change it now :-) x
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6 years ago
by Brise
Amazing Kitty, the metaphor you use of love and money is frighteningly real. Love reading your poems!
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6 years ago
aw, thanks so much Brise , lovely comment! :-) x
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6 years ago
by Michael
Brilliant Miss Kitty, a fine effort and great piece of formed
Much love
Michael :)x-
6 years ago
Thanks Michael ... I was itching to make it rhyme ... next time :-) x
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6 years ago
by Ya----Na
What a quote you wrote to give this etheree such a good end. Kitty, you are so good with the new things. I loved this etheree.
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6 years ago
Thanks so much Shane, lovely comments :-) x
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