Floating Or Failing

by CJ Maleney   Apr 25, 2018


I feel a little saddened!
And my eyes desire to bleed,
That saline solution is at bursting point,
What the hell is wrong with me?

I thought I was a tough guy!
I thought myself indestructible,
But I sit here in this lonely hour
Suffering depressions twisted spell.

Still, I am strong of body!
My heart beats and I can feel my pulse,
But what affects me so much now,
Is the mind of someone else!

I've always been so focused,
Found a means to reach an end.
It's not something I can pull off this time
As a loved one needs me there.

I have not one measure of control,
And there is nothing I can do!
But I'll drip my tears for many years
If that river sails me home to you.

    report violation
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  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    ...now I understand what it is. So much pain Craig...reading the
    words alone stabs so I can imagine how it hurts you..

    I really liked your ending..a beautifully sad write, take care ~

    • 6 years ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Thank you Meena

      It is a little sad I guess. Yet it is also filled with hope and resolve

      Craig x

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Yes, the end of this is wonderful, Craig - great last line.

    Take care and all the best as ever,

    Ben

    • 6 years ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Cheers dude

      As always your comments are received with much appreciation

      Craig

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I liked this rhyming poem, delivered in quatrains. Although the meter didn't sing to me, I found the words did. A sad song of being apart. I liked too the metaphor of crying rivers and then using that river to finally be reunited.

    Splendid.

    • 6 years ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Hey up Mr D

      I'm kinda chuffed you liked it as you are a greatly respected member here. So your words are valuable

      I never write to conform to the meter or generally in any preconceived format. Some of my stuff accidentally falls into such categories but it's generally accidental

      Ben Dutton (much missed, and I hope some of you keep in contact with him) first educated me with regard to the meter

      Sorry Ben but I've not conformed lol

      I write for the pleasure of it and sometimes to express things.

      It's not that I'm non conformist (well maybe a little) I just write what I want when i want. If people don't like it, then fine it won't alter my existence one little bit

      It is however lovely to get a comment of praise and a like

      That you did so makes me smile

      Regards

      Craig

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Craig, thank you for sharing this. It's never easy to admit when we are feeling low and that life is getting the best of us. You did this justice in this-hugs-

    • 6 years ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Hey up Bren

      In this case I'm OK in myself. Funny how the emotional state of someone else can affect oneself though

      Craig x

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