a few words in april (haiku)

by Mr. Darcy   Apr 29, 2018


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in the rain

your final words released
hidden tears

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- Mr. Darcy
© 2018.

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http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/haiku/haiku.html
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Definition of Haiku

1) An unrhymed Japanese poem recording the essence of a moment. Nature is combined with human nature. It usually consists of three lines of 5/7/5 (5 kana in the first line, 7 kana in the second line, and 5 kana in the third line) totaling seventeen kana.

2) A foreign adaptation of 1, usually written in three lines totaling 17 syllables or LESS.

As you will notice, there are two definitions. Definition #1 is where many get confused. People tend to confuse kana or a single unit in the Japanese language with the English syllable.

This is like comparing apples to oranges. Kana cannot be compared to syllables.

Unless you are Japanese, have been writing Japanese, or speak fluent Japanese, you will be writing definition #2.

The difference between the two is that in definition #2, you will be writing three lines of poetry, 17 syllables or LESS.

This means you do not have to write three lines of 5/7/5 (5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, and 5 syllables in the third line). You may do so, if you can do it well without fluff words (many can't). If you write 5/7/5, that does not make your poem more of a haiku than someone who does not write 5/7/5.

An ideal haiku should be short/long/short - but that depends on the haiku itself. There is nothing wrong with 5/7/5, if that is what you want to write. However, the majority of modern haiku in most of the journals are not 5/7/5. That doesn't mean that it doesn't have its place.

However, it is all "haiku," not "haiku" and "other." It's just haiku. If you like, you can refer to 5/7/5 as "traditional" -- but even that is not entirely accurate, as it is quickly becoming more traditional to veer away from 5/7/5. The plural of haiku is also haiku, NOT haikus.

After you have been writing and studying haiku for a while, you may be ready to break a rule. This is fine, if it is needed to improve the quality of an individual haiku.

However, before breaking any haiku rule, you must learn and practice the rules.

Then after you are more experienced, you can determine which rule, if any, you want to break on occasion.

Break rules out of experience, not inexperience.

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  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Mr. Darcy
    Loved this poem
    As per syllables count this poem is
    3,6,3
    Could you please tell us how to count kana in a haiku? Please tell us by putting an example of your own poem.

    • 6 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Hi.
      Kana, as far as I'm aware, are the English equivalent of syllables.
      As the information tagged to this poem describes - haiku forms have a longer line sandwiched between two shorter ones.
      For convenience, we define the form as a, 5,7,5 syllable/ kana. Most people do not stray from the kana count. It can, as my haiku shows, be less than the set count. Why use more kana/syllables if they are not necessary?

      My off the cuff senyru:

      No need for
      extra words when
      it's haiku

      I suggest you research further, as there is much, much more on the Internet.

      Take care.

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, I love these short poems. It's a challenge to write using so few words and how beautifully you executed this.

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Thank you my dear.
    Rainfall in April. Is this the world crying pained tears of joy? Tears for a Spring to come, or another year gone?
    Thank you for reading. It's always a pleasure x x

  • 6 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Hi Mr. Darcy,

    This feels more like a Senryu to me, but what do I know? :0)

    I like the picture it painted, very dramatic and so easy to relate to. I often feel we, as poets, are meant to suffer, just so we can offer the world the right words to read, when in despair. Then they can say: "what he said" when someone asks them how they are!

    Well done,

    ((hugs)) xx Ingrid

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    All so very well explained Mr D

    as for the Haiku - nicely done chap :)

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