Comments : a few words in april (haiku)

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Thanks for posting this, Michael, especially the information which I feel many will learn a lot from.

    All the best,

    Ben

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Great haiku Michael and thanks for all the info ... it's always been a bit of a mystery to me! :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 6 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    This maybe short Mr D but it packs a real gut wrenching punch because it brings an image to mind that 2 lovers are out walking hand in hand in the April showers then one turns to the other and says "I don't want this/us anymore" "it's not you it's me" kind of thing and the other is reduced to tears possibly tears of relief because their hidden tears are ones that say "I'm glad you said it so I didn't have to" hmm thought provoking to say the least
    Take care
    Em x

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Thanks, Em. X

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    All so very well explained Mr D

    as for the Haiku - nicely done chap :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Hi Mr. Darcy,

    This feels more like a Senryu to me, but what do I know? :0)

    I like the picture it painted, very dramatic and so easy to relate to. I often feel we, as poets, are meant to suffer, just so we can offer the world the right words to read, when in despair. Then they can say: "what he said" when someone asks them how they are!

    Well done,

    ((hugs)) xx Ingrid

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Thank you my dear.
    Rainfall in April. Is this the world crying pained tears of joy? Tears for a Spring to come, or another year gone?
    Thank you for reading. It's always a pleasure x x

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, I love these short poems. It's a challenge to write using so few words and how beautifully you executed this.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Mr. Darcy
    Loved this poem
    As per syllables count this poem is
    3,6,3
    Could you please tell us how to count kana in a haiku? Please tell us by putting an example of your own poem.

    • 6 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Hi.
      Kana, as far as I'm aware, are the English equivalent of syllables.
      As the information tagged to this poem describes - haiku forms have a longer line sandwiched between two shorter ones.
      For convenience, we define the form as a, 5,7,5 syllable/ kana. Most people do not stray from the kana count. It can, as my haiku shows, be less than the set count. Why use more kana/syllables if they are not necessary?

      My off the cuff senyru:

      No need for
      extra words when
      it's haiku

      I suggest you research further, as there is much, much more on the Internet.

      Take care.