A well rhymed and seductive sort of write, Brise. Well done.

Ben

Hi Brise, first of all, I want to request you please don't write such steamy poems. It's become hard for someone of my age to handle it. Seriously, it's for the first time I am giving my comments on something this hot.

A poem based on sensual or secret love. Atmosphere is hot and humid. Tone is seductive. I have seen such visuals you described in second stanza only in movies. I just hope 'poached slips' is not what I am thinking right now.

As poem says, you want your lover to admit that he loves you and you want him to quench his thirst by drinking love from every inch of your body. However, all you tried to tell him that how much you want him to have you in that moment, in the end everything, all those amorous emotions you felt just ruined. I guess that's what the last stanza all about.

To be honest, Brise, I can't write much like I usually do, as much I want to for this poem because then it gonna make it even more seductive. But one thing I would like to say about your writing that you have an art of playing with words.
Lines like...
Rip this fantasy, your ransom kills me in inches or poached slips are very cleverly done.

I thoroughly enjoyed it, nothing is wrong with this poem. I mean good choice of words with good rhyming. I wasn't going to nominate any poem this week but then I read this poem and I couldn't stop myself. I don't know why no one else before me nominated it.

All the best!

If this guy had been resisting you Brise, I'm pretty sure this would break his resolve! Very sexy and brilliant imagery. I really enjoyed it. Well done! :-) x
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