Haiku.

by MoonMaiden   May 24, 2018


My heart cries for you,
..
Missing your warm loving embrace, I cherish..
..
Like summer nights of blue..

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  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hi.
    It's always nice to see a haiku. I noticed here a definite improvement. You have 5 words in the first line, 7 in the 2nd and 5 in the 3rd.

    Syllables is one word, but is made up of 3 separate syllables. A haiku is, for the most part written using a 5, 7, 5 syllable count.

    I'll break your lines into syllables:

    My/ heart/ cries/ for/ you,
    ..
    Miss/ing your warm lov/ing em/brace, I cher/ish..
    ..
    Like sum/mer nights of blue..
    ^
    As you can see line 2 has 11 syllables and line 3, 6 syllables

    I hope this helps.

    Take care.

    • 6 years ago

      by MoonMaiden

      Yes, I took your advice and checked out the website. (:
      Thank you for checking up and your kind comments.