Haiku #8

by MoonMaiden   May 24, 2018


Salty air and ocean breeze
..
Casting my hope out into the sea
..
Fishing for my rusty lead
..

( ** Casting my line, my hopes for love. Fishing for my old friend. To hopefully ignite what we once had. ** )

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  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hi.
    Although I like the poem, the syllable count is incorrect.

    I'll count them for you:

    Salt/y air and o/cean breeze =7
    ..
    Cast/ing my hope out in/to the sea =9
    ..
    Fish/ing for my rust/y lead = 7
    ^
    Let me know if this makes sense.

    Take care.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Some lovely use of metaphor. Well done - I enjoyed this one.

    Take care and all the best

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