A moral (double etheree)

by Michael   Jun 7, 2018


Their
secret
came undone
like a shoe lace
tripping them over
both became tangled up
but only one was twisted
and although one escaped unscathed
one sadly left with the wounds of the fall
of course not the one who held the deceit
for it was the other left with scars
one now grazes in greener grass
the moral to this story
is that if the shoe fits
then one will maybe
learn for next time
and untie
the truth
first.

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  • 6 years ago

    by Phoenix ¥

    A really interesting poem which I wanted to reread straight away! Excellent metaphors that create such an image.
    Great write x

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Phoenix for lovely comments :)x

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Fantastic metaphors here Michael in your superbly written form. Glad to see it's nominated :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Kitty, lovely comments :)x

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Amen Michael! Amen!

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Brenda :)x

  • 6 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Speaking of moral. Michael you did an amazing job . More need to read this. Hugs to you.

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Dagmar :)x

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    At times my tongue was getting tangled like your laces, but this story has a worthy moral, and so it was worth it!

    Nicely written, Michael. I like this form. I like it for the visual aspect, but also, in its double form, it can split a story nicely in half.

    Nice work :)

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Yes bit of a tongue twister ;)
      Thanks for your comments Mr D :)

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