Once the jasmines grow (Rondeau)

by Ya----Na   Jun 25, 2018


Once the jasmines grow in my heart,
my dying soul won't rip apart.
Within the essence of your name,
it will bloom time and time again.
The pests will begin to depart.

Love is an incredible art.
The thoughts and feelings' counterpart,
a stroke of your dreams I can frame.
Once the jasmines grow...

Your fragrance is so sweet and tart.
Moon and stars are now off the chart.
There isn't tomorrow in this game.
So could you please ignite the flame?
Give me a cue, oh my sweetheart!
Once the jasmines grow...

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  • 6 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Judging comment:

    A structured writing, that too a rondeau. I do not know much about the technicalities of a rondeau but this piece was very well presented. Many a times, I personally feel, structured poetry is attempted very well, is likeable to read, but tends to be a hit and a miss (I myself have been a victim to these attempts) but this piece was very well done. It was beautiful written in a difficult structure as I have known, and did not let the reader drift apart with mismatched sentences. Full of hope, this piece deserves my full praise. Well done.

  • 6 years ago

    by naaz

    Sorry, won't be able to write in depth comment for this beautiful creation of yours, but would like to say something.

    Tout amour semé, tot ou tard, fleurira.

    • 6 years ago

      by Ya----Na

      Mais elle ne comprend pas qu'une fleur ne peut pas fleurir sans soleil, et l'homme ne peut pas vivre sans amour.

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Aw Shane! A well deserved win. Such a beautiful write and perfect for the Rondeau form :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Thank you so much, everyone, once again

  • 6 years ago

    by Brise

    This is beautiful! Congrats on the win :)

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