by Blank Jul 1, 2018
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Sleep, is all I want |
by Darren
A small poem that started as a senryu then dipped its toe into Haiku in the final line. I still feel this is probably more Senryu as it’s more about your feelings than nature. However that said I love how each line is a mere snippet of so much more. |
I can relate so well. Sleep is all I want. When you hear the birds sing we k ow it's time to get up and feeling drained. Add to my favorite. All the best to yiu |
by Em (marmite)
I absolutely loved this Fenrir because its so relatable and as Ben said kind of) the birds are magical on their on but come morning time when you've had little or no sleep whatsoever you just feel like getting an imaginary shotgun and shooting them just to get an hour but then again that hour will probably make matters worse and those burning eyes sting more unfortunately so we just have to just face reality that little bit earlier, face defeat or just lay awake and imagine how it'd feel having a fill night's unbroken sleep mmm now wouldn't that be magical haha?? Great write. |
by Blank
Thank you so much, Em (and everyone else). |
by CRAFTY KEN
Very nice Fenrir, I like the haiku style, you can say much with just a few words, imagination takes care of the rest. People can interpret it with their own thoughts also. |
by Ben Pickard
Love the ending. I have to be honest, as much as I love birds singing, there is no more depressing sound at 4 or 5 in the morning when you realise a whole night of rest has past you by and another day is already being heralded. |