Pause (Rondeau)

by Kitty Cat Lady   Jul 16, 2018


You make me forget and I feel so free
as you whisper your words so softly to me
the hairs on my neck stand on end to receive
the trail of soft kisses on my skin you leave
a passionate promise of all that will be

my mind taking pause so willingly
reacting purely instinctively
a welcome emotional reprieve
you make me forget

the song of my flesh signals a plea
to scatter my mind exquisitely
to salve my stress and so relieve
my tension with the bliss that you weave
and even if only fleetingly ...

you make me forget.

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  • 6 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Judging comment:

    Oh wonderful, this was quite a refreshing piece to read — full of hope, joy and a beautiful, bright future — all mixed into a single piece of a difficult form, the rondeau. You have very beautifully penned this write and this is absolutely breathtaking. Hope to read many more cheerful pieces from you. Congratulations.

    • 6 years ago

      by Kitty Cat Lady

      Thanks so very much for your judging comments and your points Gumshuda, I really appreciate it :-) x
      =^.^=

  • 6 years ago

    by naaz

    I loved how you wrote or placed, you make me forget, in the last stanza.

    It's like you did it intentionally. Mostly, it comes after the other line. Like, he really made you forget.

    See, these little things, details differentiate the best among the rest.

    Very creative, KCL!

    I think, this week judges should go for senyru, rondeau, haiku and your poem should be on the front page with Ben and Tony's senyru.

    All the best!

    • 6 years ago

      by Kitty Cat Lady

      Naaz, such lovely comments - thank you so much :-) x
      =^.^=

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Such a bliss to read this poem. Perfect

  • 6 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Loved it. Great rhyming with sensuous undertone this could be a lover, cat or a gentle breeze. It is beautifully written and open to much interpretation. A very clever piece well worth the nomination. Milly x

    • 6 years ago

      by Kitty Cat Lady

      It's so lovely to see you here Milly and thanks for your lovely comments :-) x
      =^.^=

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Miss Kitty,

    What a lovely rondeau, clever lady. I had to 'paws' for thought on this ;)
    Well done indeed
    Much love
    Michael :)x

    • 6 years ago

      by Kitty Cat Lady

      Tee hee :-) thanks so much lovely :-) x
      =^.^=

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