Blank, that's the name.

by Blank   Jul 22, 2018


Blank, was the name.
No emotions, no name.
Just an empty card,
With this face and hair.
My dull, tired eyes.
And frozen frown, why does it seem so permanant?

"Are you okay?"
That's what they ask.
"I'm fine," Is all I can think.
Because that's what I believe.
I forgot how to be happy, but I forgot how to be sad.
How do I become mad?
There's nothing left.
A hollow shell.
A hollow person.
An empty soul.
I'll never last.
Sorry, what was that?
Oh yes.....

Blank, that's the name.

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  • 6 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    I literally just read this poem, http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/poems/1267445, and couldn't help but notice some parallels! How ironic!

    Regardless, this is a very relatable piece. That feeling of exhaustion where you just stop feeling anything, and you crave some feeling, which I believe is what drives people to forms of self-mutilation. I think I mutilate myself socially by cutting myself off from nearly anyone around me, becoming a self-fulfilling prophecy of loneliness.

    Anyway, I went on a tangent there, as I always seem to do. This poem made me think and be introspective, and I thank you for that. A couple corrections I'd offer up, for ease of reading:

    Original:
    My dull and tired eyes.
    And frozen frown, why does it seem to permenant?

    Suggested:
    My dull, tired eyes
    and frozen frown. Why does it seem so permanent?

    (Just taking a liberty with the punctuation, but starting a sentence with "And" was a bit confusing and permanent was misspelled).

    Original:
    "Are you okay?"
    That's what they say.

    Suggested:
    That's what they ask.
    (It would seem "they" are asking, so I would suggest changing "say" to "ask.")

    Original:
    "I'm fine." Is all I can think.

    Suggested:
    "I'm fine," is all I can think.

    Thanks for sharing!
    S

    • 6 years ago

      by Blank

      I wondered if I had spelt a word wrong, and thank you for the feedback, I definetly prefer the edits, to which I will change, thank you.