Comments : Quicksand

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I like the simile of loosing a relationship to feeling like quicksand. Sinking deeper, the harder you try to not sink, the deeper you go. I like the refrain too ' baby, baby, baby' by repeating this it conveyed the emotion this poem required.
    Finally, you leave the reader with hope...

    There are a few edits needed here and there, but all in all a good write.

    Take care.