Comments : Fallen leaves of confusion

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    This really is a lovely write. In one breath you want to just fall into the relationship and just be. On the other you feel like you are walking through a landmine. I think that love sometimes is like that. Well done-

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    SG,
    Certainly a journey here, and done really well my friend :)

    Just take a look at 3rd verse, do you mean - 'sit' rather than 'sits' or 'a' before butterfly? 'grew' - growing?
    or 'that grew'
    But a great piece anyhow
    M :)

    • 6 years ago

      by Ya----Na

      Michael, thank you for genuine advice and making my poem more beautiful. Yes, it should be growing because flowers of happiness are growing everyday.

  • 6 years ago

    by Mortal Utopia

    This is beautiful :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    SG,
    congratulations for your win with this excellent piece.

  • 6 years ago

    by Mark

    Beautiful win!

  • 6 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Judging comment:

    A beautiful poem filled with the hopes of love. Although there might be confusion in your heart, but this poem also reflects happiness in each and every sentence and there is a brimming horizon of happiness for every doubt, confusion and other blurred feelings felt in this. I particularly loved the imagery used, especially "the crayon dreams" made.