Comments : Hemlock

  • 6 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Oh my word..... I've read this a dozen times and I'm quite literally bawling why I'm not so sure... But this hit me harder than anything I've read recently and before I'd have said it's so resalable because I've been there, yearning to be with a guy just like the way you described if that makes sense wanting them to want you back but it's not happened until now and my goodness does it feel good you'll get it one day and you'll wonder what all this heartache was for but I absolutely love how you describe everything here and I'm glad to see it's nominated

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    What a great poem. Details after details. You write in depth of the depth. Unique style. From beginning till the end everything went perfect.

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Rosy cheeks and irony,
    there is something I like about your poem. What I feel is that, when I have read previous poems of yours, this one is lacking. I have noticed before that you write a '1st draft'. Can you tell me more why? And what is the difference, when you don't ?

    You have a talent as a writer, but I feel that you can dig deeper into your art :)

    Michael x

    • 6 years ago

      by Rosy Cheeks And Irony

      I am actually not very confident in some of my poems, causing me to ultimately do a 1st draft out of fear that people see them as not living up to what the essence of a poem is, however sometimes i do also do first drafts because i feel sometimes when i "finish" a poem i might not like the ending, or it might be too long and i leave it an post it as a first draft until i can then change it into something i am more proud to keep as somewhat "whole." I am glad you see this poem as lacking, because that was partially the point :) The intimacy i have tried to portray within this poem is something i want the reader to see as almost untouchable and complete within itself, with no need for a further explanation. If this doesn't make sense i'm sorry, its very early for me and i normally write later one lol, if you want me to rephrase please just ask. And thank you for your advice xxxx

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    I liked this a lot. Your poems are so raw with emotion and you write with a depth that belies your age. I think we all have been in that relationship. Toxic, lethal...well done-