Comments : My children (senyru)

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A wonderful use of metaphor, Michael, likening your children to opposite but beautiful flavours.

    Well done and all the best

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Ah Michael, love this! It's just beautiful!

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Brenda :)x

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Morning, Michael.
    Children arguably evoke the most powerful of questions: which one do you love most? This of course is impossible to answer when you love them for who they are.

    Suggestion:
    To make the poem more personal, perhaps?

    Children

    flavours of my life
    such beautiful opposites
    both crème de la creme

    Either way, lovely work.

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Thanks Mr D, and that maybe a good decision :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    This brought a smile to my face and just with those few lines
    I feel the love and the delight which lies in these words..lovely!

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Meena :)x

  • 6 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Or combined like Oreos.

    Love this

    Craig

    • 6 years ago

      by Michael

      haha, indeed fella, thank you :)