Comments : Borrowed Time

  • 6 years ago

    by Darren

    This is sad and clever, asks many questions and gets the reader thinking.
    I love the whole 'good die young' angle. It does make you ponder.
    My only small nit is line two,
    not sure you need 'of'
    so could read
    I ask an angel who resembles me

    That aside I enjoyed reading this

    take care

    • 6 years ago

      by 14th

      Sorry about your “small nit”
      My soul is suffering
      Everyday I wake
      The only time I feel alive
      Is in my sleep
      In my dreams
      I wish I could never wake up
      I don’t know which is which
      Am I asleep? when I’m up?
      Or awake when I’m sleep?
      Reality seems of a nightmare
      And dreams are so peaceful
      Forever my dream is to die in my reality