Comments : True Lies (Vingt et Un)

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Genuinely genius.

  • 6 years ago

    by Darren

    Love to see a new form, especially one that isn't either a Rondeau or Sonnet.
    Whether its just my pronunciation, but I make line 1, 8 syllables.

    Every (2, or three ev-er-ree depending on how you say it or where you come from)
    Poem (2 Po-em) see above^
    has (1)
    a (1)
    Kernel (2)

    Funny thing is, I didn't start this comment out as a critique

    just naturally double checked when I reached your explanation

    • 6 years ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      Darren,
      I did consider these issues but decided that the syllables you reference are elided in normal (American) speech.
      By all means I think there is far too little critical analysis in these comments and both appreciate and applaud your advice.

  • 6 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Every lie also has a kernel of truth.

    Always trust a liar. For you can trust him to lie. Distrust the honest because they will never be honest about their lies.

    Not my words but something I read once

  • 6 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    For me, the power of poetry is the reconstruction of truth in ways that don’t actually exist in the real world but are relatable.

  • 6 years ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Like it Larry for its simplicity, and, kernel truth revealed in the perfect 21 syllables!
    Very nice work.
    Ken