Comments : Sparrows

  • 6 years ago

    by D.

    Strong descriptive language in the second and third stanzas! I liked the chaos in the imagery and word order. Nice write.

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    Chaos as in, you don’t really tend to follow strict grammar rules. It is chaotic as your sentence structures are unique, they make the reader do a double take. It’s not a bad thing...poets have more of a freedom with language than others.

    • 6 years ago

      by ddavidd

      Thank you for the compliment. The chaos is a unique point of view that I wish you could elaborate. I understand that most order come from chaos but I am interested to know more.

  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Wow...this is really beautiful and your language is so vivid
    and captivating and at the same time the tone is smooth and loving
    lovely write!!

    • 6 years ago

      by ddavidd

      Thanks Meena you always have had sweet tooth for tenderness.