Do the thoughts become yours, after you catch the fishes, or only you catch them with your eyes and they still would not be belonged??
You always start a very deep un answerable queries through your deep clutch of imaginative thoughts and instead of leaving them be in their own unspecified natural inhabitant, try to make sense of them and make the intangible, tangible, even though acknowledging their intangible descriptions.

Even though regardless of your sometime lesser success, I admire your daringness. It is good sometime to make a fool out of yourself, and disregard the audience. I am not saying that it is what transpired here but I see the potential.
My advise: go for it, you have only your gravity to lose. Being attached too much to the audience, in long run, suffocates ones raw talent.
All in my humble opinion. ((take it with a grain of salt. ))

Such a joy read!!