Second thoughts

Judge's Comment:

This poem hit me hard. It is a very brief piece, but it is so topical in a society where depression and suicide are at societal highs. I especially like the wording at the end where Michael says “the noose chokes”. It plays with the reader’s mind and causes the thought, “Maybe he did it after all.” A very clever diversion technique for a reader who thinks they already know how it ends because of the title, and overall a powerful write.

-Stephen

Thank you all, and for you lovely comments :)

This is excellent, Michael. The form helps the poem breathe and allows the imagery to sit, and not be rushed. The last stanza is skilfully written, and i enjoy the image of a lone rope hanging. It is not completely clear what is happening in this poem, but I think you intended that. :) I’ve never read a poem about someone who reconsidered suicide, well done!

Nicely put Michael. Your imagery is spot on.

Its like clouded with clues for a mystery to ponder
upon...Like the imagery and the layout...nicely done!