by D. Nov 20, 2018
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
butterflies |
Judge's Comment: |
by Nikkicola
This is beautiful. I love the message you're portraying in this piece. This piece reminds me of when hopelessness and fear has swallowed me in the past and has taken over every rational thought I had. Then in the end a glimpse of hope shining through in a time you thought it was impossible. |
by D.
I’m glad you enjoyed, and could relate in some way. I hope you always find no monsters at your door :) |
It's fascinating how in the second half of the poem, the direction is changed, the tone moves to determined, and I feel a rush of hope. Like you are putting yourself out there among your fears, among what your mind tries to convince you is real. The ending lines actually made me think of agoraphobia. Surrendering to one's body could also be representing anxiety and how our thoughts can try to persuade us we are too weak, that the world is too cruel, that these foul creatures exist. Such strong imagery that portrays the complexity of trying to conquer this fear, of recognizing there is more than the darkness of fear, in knowing there are others who can enliven your spirit. My only qualm was with the line "for an age wolves howl", I couldn't figure out if that should be "an aged wolf"? The "for an age" just sounded awkward aloud but then again it could very obviously be me not understanding lol. |
by Darren
Congrats on another win, knocking them out of the park on your return. |
by D.
Hahaha folklore may be a slight exaggeration :P I had always considered returning and I couldn’t have asked for s nicer welcome! Thank you Darren. |
by Jamie
Congrats on your win |
by D.
Thank you dude :) |