Comments : Apostasy

  • 5 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Brilliant!

  • 5 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    (I liked this when I read it earlier in the week and thought I'd commented but for some reason it didnt save) I really liked the contrasted perceptions between the love interest initially being visualised as something precious and magnificent like marble pillars at the entrance of the temple but then as reality set in being religated to being nothing more than frayed tapestries draped on the alter. Lovely visuals and concept. Milly x

    • 5 years ago

      by Aegis

      You pretty much nailed it Milly. Although, even though I've been romantically and emotionally involved with both of these people in the past, I've only ever seen them as pillars of support and strength. Recently I learned that I have to be my own pillars, my own strength. Not every light in your life is worth keeping on I guess. Thanks for your time and words<3

  • 5 years ago

    by D.

    I read this as if the narrator was a king or something. Just the use of ‘temple’ is implicating unworthiness, even in the first stanza. I guess every temple needs pillars, but not a tapestry!

  • 5 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Placing that much emphasis on another can only end with collapse. I like the initial grandeur of the extending metaphor leading to wonderfully dark conclusion.

    Nice work.