Lovely little piece with some beautiful imagery captured in very few words.

All the very best,
Ben

What beautiful imagery. There is so much depth in such a few words. Loved it. Milly x

What beautiful imagery. There is so much depth in such a few words. Loved it. Milly x

This is a great Haiku but you need to rewrite the 3d. closing line.
It has to have a punch to it! A phrase, that reflects on the first two lines yet it will give reader a punch , kind of leaving you breathless because the meaning so so deep....
You know what i mean right?! Amd you will recall that poem a year later...
I have read Haikus that when I finished reading it I was in tears... They were that meaningful...
Anyway, Im sorry if you think this was a bit much... lol