This poem read to me like a deep inhale then exhale. I smiled at "soldiers made of sun" and the paradise yet adventure you have laid out here for the reader. Usually I am not a fan of each line being capitalized and a comma after each line, as sometimes it is not needed if a line flows naturally into the next, but I didn't feel it that distracting with this poem. There's almost an innocence and a calming flow.

Oh, and welcome to PnQ! Hope to read more of your work :)