For me this is a unique and visually uplifting piece. The first two stanzas were captivating and intriguing and could have taken the reader in a choice of directions either one which would have worked. The third and fourth stanza clarify and take the crucial stance that fire cleanses even if it destroys. Which leads nicely into the final stanzas 'the reveal' that sometimes it is necessary to burn away the facades that hide away the inner truth and strength within. |
Thanks Milly! You really got this piece, I so appreciate the detailed feedback. Don't worry if you can't nominate me, I just love this site and it is not about winning, it is just a great place to discover other people who are writing. This was the fourth poem in the month with the theme Elements. I had a great time thinking about all four poems. This month, my friend and I are focusing on addictions. She is a street photographer and I am the writer. |
by Brenda
Tanya, I really liked this a lot. Your visuals and how it wend about was awesome! |
Thanks so much Brenda x |
Well I think Milly has said the perfect response to this piece. This really got my mind tweaking and I have to admit I had to read it a few times to fully take it in. |
Thank you, as I read it again. I think I can use it as the introduction to the memoir I am writing! You just prompted another thought for me. Appreciate it. |