Comments : I wish I

  • 5 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Loved this clever rhymed piece. Flows throughout and has a great twist at the end. Had to nominate. Milly x

    • 5 years ago

      by Walter

      Thanks so much Milly for your comment and also your nomination!
      Walter :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Nice work, Walter. As Milly said, clever and with a nice twist. Congratulations!

    • 5 years ago

      by Walter

      Thank you Mr. Darcy

  • 5 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    There's almost a playfulness I perceived with the rhyme, and it was certainly not the ending I was expecting, which gave this piece depth and darker notes. Isn't it incredible how we can stand or get in the way of ourselves? That we can sometimes be our own roadblock to happiness or moving forward to something that may help us grow?

    Just one note that the fourth stanza, third line should read "breathe". Congrats on the win!

    • 5 years ago

      by Walter

      Thanks Poet and I appreciate your comments. And also for pointing out that typo I let slip by...now corrected.

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A hearty congratulations, Walter. Well deserved.

    • 5 years ago

      by Walter

      Many thanks Ben.