You have a delicacy with your words, Daniel, that is truly a talent and cannot be learnt.

All the best and stay well.

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Ooh yes he does!! This left me feeling cold.
It is good to read something from you Daniel!!

Nicely written Daniel! This write flowed, well like water, lol. Well done-

Glad to see this nomated. A superb piece not forced, flows well full of emotion. Milly x

Glad to see this nominated

There's a deliberate tone to these words that bear more than imagery. There is a weight of loss and memory too. To me, this careful walk through sepia sand is haunting.
Excellent.

I am glad to see this nominated. There is something about this that goes much deeper. Add to my favorite. All the best to you

Reading this the first few times, I honestly didn't think you needed so many commas, as the way you placed and spaced the lines gave a natural pause. Like the third, fourth and fifth stanza I thought didn't need the commas, but that's completely my opinion! I feel like a pause is implied when you skip a line. There's a tenderness in this, of the worry and wonder if the ocean and storms will be cruel, if tonight will be the night. That even the best of sailors, the most prepared of men, can fall prey to this storm and be captured by it. I also loved how you mentioned the kiss good morning but not goodbye, that emphasis that it is not the end.

The anticipation at the end and the anxiety is palpable, the softest patter of rain can turn into a nightmare.