Comments : Mimicking Nothingness

  • 5 years ago

    by Star

    This felt like earth tectonics , it kept moving!!
    But that doesn’t have to be a bad thing, does it?

    • 5 years ago

      by ddavidd

      Dear Star I thought I responded to this. I remember it was at least a paragraph and now it is gone. Thanks
      I guess I did not click the post bottom

  • 5 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Liked the flowing feel of this and some great rhyming here. Really liked the "Everything must split to the dust, Everything must curtail and rust" Milly

    • 5 years ago

      by ddavidd

      Thank you Milli for your time and compliment.

  • 5 years ago

    by Sunshine

    What an inspiring poem. It's very philosophical too, and very sad.

    I think you should let go of article (the) in the following line [turns to the sand,]

    I think it would flow much better with the rest of your very silky lines. I love it!

    • 5 years ago

      by ddavidd

      Thank you so much Rania I would love it if you do that.

    • 5 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Yeah, don’t let go of the article. it changes the meaning. The article it’s needed in my opinion. Good read. Thanks for sharing.