that was a very very good poem, just a couple of things, (sorry i'm really picky) you spelt planned-planed and i didn't quite get the rhyming scheme, it kind of rhymed occasionally but not always, i dunno that might be what you meant to do and i'm just dumb and didn't get it, lol, anyways tops poem!

wow that is a great poem. thanks for commenting on mine. You are an awesome writer and yours touched me very much. I understand to. God Bless