by Everlasting
I like the repetition of “keep callin’ but can’t make a sound... actually, that part sounds smooth. The first and third stanza have lines that seem force. Other than that, I enjoyed the poem. It’s like a song. Thanks for sharing. |
Thanks! I wrote part of it a while ago, then came back and tacked on the rest later...so part of it was a little less smooth. |
by Brenda
I liked this a lot. The repetition flows well. I hope these rain clouds clear for you. |
Thanks. |